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Jaxon

Producer, Editor, Director. I like dogs, vampires, and time travel.

From
Los Angeles

Member Since
2015-08-17T20:24:23.064Z
conceptually this is almost prefect. "Procedural cop show with a twist" is a pitch they ALWAYS want to hear, but I don't know if the God angle is too limiting. Well done overall anyway.
Reviewed: 2015-08-18T19:29:31.487Z
solid job conveying the idea, and the show. But do we really need another one of these shows?
Reviewed: 2015-08-18T19:29:31.487Z
Thanks. Good points. Very helpful.2015-10-06T05:52:45.464Z
solid job all around. I get the premise, I get an idea of the mechanics of the show, I get the style. Well done. The characters are not 'exciting' enough though. Reality TV lives or dies on the personalities of the people they are about, and these two guys just seem like a couple of ordinary dudes. Anything you can do to add some flair to these guys (or recast them) would help a lot.
Reviewed: 2015-08-18T19:23:28.892Z
Many thanks for your kind review...2015-10-06T05:37:11.625Z
You REALLY ought to take that speech she gives at the end, and put it right at the start. It explains the whole premise, but by the end where it is now, it's too late. Good acting overall, looks nice too.
Reviewed: 2015-08-18T19:23:28.892Z
Many thanks...2015-10-06T05:48:57.025Z
AHHHH! VOICE OVER! if only you'd used voice over. reading all that text over the great imagery was really diffusing the whole thing. But a great idea for a show. well executed overall.
Reviewed: 2015-08-18T19:13:47.956Z
second time being subjected to this and it still makes no sense. is it a hidden camera gag show? is it a reality show? it is a scripted show? I have no idea.
Reviewed: 2015-08-18T19:13:47.956Z
Thanks again...2015-10-06T05:44:49.608Z
Nice music choices. This does very little to show/tell the premise of the show. The lead guy reads very feminine, so it's a hard sell to see him romantically interested in the lead girl. By the end, I still have no idea what an episode of this show would be like. I think titles/voice over would solve a great deal of the problems here.
Reviewed: 2015-08-18T19:02:54.041Z
This is a very very good idea for a series. It's very easy to pitch. I would be surprised if an idea very similar to this is not already in development somewhere. Your AE skills are decent, and it does a moderate job of conveying the concept of the show without shooting anything. But, the pacing is very slow, and the use of the amazing archival footage was disappointingly underdeveloped. Concept: 10 execution: 6
Reviewed: 2015-08-18T19:02:54.041Z
I have no idea what this show is supposed to be about at all.
Reviewed: 2015-08-17T20:30:44.009Z
Thanks...2015-10-06T05:41:49.038Z
maybe too maybe characters very hard to track them all
Reviewed: 2015-08-17T20:30:44.009Z